Rebuttals:
1. Have an intro that ropes people in and gives them good information.
2. Persoalize the essay. Add a character and have a story about them come up throughout the essay.
3. Have an anecdote in the beginning that introduces the topic.
4. Use sites and interviews efficiently.
5. Appeal to what people actually care about.
Monday, August 8, 2011
Tuesday, August 2, 2011
Cultural Evaluation
"Types of Dance: A History of Social Dance in America -- AAS Online Exhibition." American Antiquarian Society. AAS Online Exhibitions. Web. 02 Aug. 2011. <http://www.americanantiquarian.org/Exhibitions/Dance/types.htm>.
I can use this website to talk about the different types of dance and the impact they have on our society.
Eric, Treak. "Ballet As an Art Form." Ezinearticles. Web. 1 Aug. 2011. <http://ezinearticles.com/?Ballet-As-an-Art-Form&id=4035159>.
This source can be used to set up my argument that dance is an art and the effects arts have on our culture.
Brooks, Bonnie. "Here and Now - Impact of Dance on Culture and Society in the Late Twentieth Century - Column | Dance Magazine | Find Articles at BNET." Find Articles at BNET | News Articles, Magazine Back Issues & Reference Articles on All Topics. Feb. 1998. Web. 02 Aug. 2011. <http://findarticles.com/p/articles/mi_m1083/is_n2_v72/ai_20187613/>.
This source can be used to show the impact that dance has on society as a whole.
I'm evaluating the (good) impact that dance has on society. It can be a form of education and a different learning experience for the audience. There are many new tv shows and movies about dancing which sparks an interest in the activity and may get people more involved. It benefits everyone, the dancers and the audience. The dancers stay active and the audience gets to observe a beautiful form of art.
I can use this website to talk about the different types of dance and the impact they have on our society.
Eric, Treak. "Ballet As an Art Form." Ezinearticles. Web. 1 Aug. 2011. <http://ezinearticles.com/?Ballet-As-an-Art-Form&id=4035159>.
This source can be used to set up my argument that dance is an art and the effects arts have on our culture.
Brooks, Bonnie. "Here and Now - Impact of Dance on Culture and Society in the Late Twentieth Century - Column | Dance Magazine | Find Articles at BNET." Find Articles at BNET | News Articles, Magazine Back Issues & Reference Articles on All Topics. Feb. 1998. Web. 02 Aug. 2011. <http://findarticles.com/p/articles/mi_m1083/is_n2_v72/ai_20187613/>.
This source can be used to show the impact that dance has on society as a whole.
I'm evaluating the (good) impact that dance has on society. It can be a form of education and a different learning experience for the audience. There are many new tv shows and movies about dancing which sparks an interest in the activity and may get people more involved. It benefits everyone, the dancers and the audience. The dancers stay active and the audience gets to observe a beautiful form of art.
Sunday, July 31, 2011
Gaga
The What's Sex Got To Do With It? article explains why the author believes that Lady Gaga will be the death of sex for our generation or the end of the sexual revolution. The beginning of the article talks about how successful Lady Gaga is, how many albums & singles she's sold and how she's continually been on tour. The first thing that really appeals to me is when the author says that her "little monsters" are "damaged goods in need of her therapeutic repair." and then goes on to talk about how her whole show is about how everyone is perfect the way they are. Both articles are successful in making me believe that Lady Gaga (Stefani Germanotta) is not as lonely, and outcast as she makes herself out to be. She went to the same school as the Hilton sisters, how bad off can you be? They both talk about how lady gaga is manufactured. The second article points out how lady gaga uses transgendered because it is part of the dominant culture's language and points out that as the author was writing it, her spellcheck underlined the word. The whole "little monsters" thing is definitely easy to relate to and is a good thing to bring up on the authors' part.
Cultural Objects
Going Green
Going green is really getting big in our culture. It's becoming trendy to recycle anything and everything. It's hip to buy things made from 100% recycled materials. It's really good for our culture and our world but I think it needs to catch on more so we can recycle more and have less stuff going into landfills and clogging them up. We will eventually run out of room in the landfills. The going green revolution needs to catch on even more so we can recycle more and help our environment.
Teen Mom & 16 and Pregnant
16 & pregnant and teen mom are shows on MTV that show what happens to teens during the 9 months of pregnancy and the first couple years of the baby's life. These shows are not beneficial for our society because they glorify teen girls getting pregnant and raising children. Not that being a teenage mother is bad, but MTV makes it out to be so trendy. Same with shows like Jersey Shore. They praise things that should not be praised for the gullible kids in my generation.
NASA
Okay, maybe NASA isn't a big deal for everyone in my culture but to me it is. I follow NASA on twitter, I probably retweet them more than I retweet any of my own friends and I go on the NASA website and watch NASAtv religiously. But it is a big deal in our society because they're not going to be getting the funding from the government anymore so there is a debate about what is going to happen. President Obama said that any projects that we are planning to do will be passed to other countries space travel organizations and other exploration will be able to be done by private organizations. NASA's funding situation will probably be bad for our society as a whole because we wont be able to have the knowledge that we are capable of learning.
Going green is really getting big in our culture. It's becoming trendy to recycle anything and everything. It's hip to buy things made from 100% recycled materials. It's really good for our culture and our world but I think it needs to catch on more so we can recycle more and have less stuff going into landfills and clogging them up. We will eventually run out of room in the landfills. The going green revolution needs to catch on even more so we can recycle more and help our environment.
Teen Mom & 16 and Pregnant
16 & pregnant and teen mom are shows on MTV that show what happens to teens during the 9 months of pregnancy and the first couple years of the baby's life. These shows are not beneficial for our society because they glorify teen girls getting pregnant and raising children. Not that being a teenage mother is bad, but MTV makes it out to be so trendy. Same with shows like Jersey Shore. They praise things that should not be praised for the gullible kids in my generation.
NASA
Okay, maybe NASA isn't a big deal for everyone in my culture but to me it is. I follow NASA on twitter, I probably retweet them more than I retweet any of my own friends and I go on the NASA website and watch NASAtv religiously. But it is a big deal in our society because they're not going to be getting the funding from the government anymore so there is a debate about what is going to happen. President Obama said that any projects that we are planning to do will be passed to other countries space travel organizations and other exploration will be able to be done by private organizations. NASA's funding situation will probably be bad for our society as a whole because we wont be able to have the knowledge that we are capable of learning.
Friday, July 29, 2011
Peer Review 7/27
This peer review was definitely different because of the kind of essay we were writing so we had to edit in a different way. I'm still improving on my editing skills but I think (and hope) that I was able to help Eric with his paper. I feel like I gave him a lot of comments that were pretty helpful. Eric helped me a lot too. He pointed out a lot of places where I could add more description and pointed out some awkward points and I think they helped my essay a lot. It was helpful to hear his feedback and I was glad to see that he understood what my purpose is.
Monday, July 25, 2011
Reading Response
1. These essays are definitely less formal than the other kinds of essays I'm used to reading and writing. The essays I've written have mainly been about content, sources, and what your argument is. Josh's essays and the gaming addiction one are more about telling a story and getting a message out about themselves to the reader.
2. The Purpose of the "I Kept Playing" essay was to show readers from the author's experience how dangerous gaming addiction can be. You can lose track of almost everything. The author lost his job, wasn't eating right, wasn't sleeping enough, and all he focused on was playing that game. The audience for this essay would probably be people who play videogames or families of people who play a lot of videogames because they would be interested in someone else's side of the story.
2. The Purpose of the "I Kept Playing" essay was to show readers from the author's experience how dangerous gaming addiction can be. You can lose track of almost everything. The author lost his job, wasn't eating right, wasn't sleeping enough, and all he focused on was playing that game. The audience for this essay would probably be people who play videogames or families of people who play a lot of videogames because they would be interested in someone else's side of the story.
Sunday, July 24, 2011
Freewrite #3
My first memory is actually late in my life (I think) I remember being probably three years old and my mom used to work as a messenger for different businesses delivering their inter-office mail to each different business. I remember riding along with her to the different buildings every day and for some reason the main part of the memories are the songs that would come on the radio. I can’t think of any right now but if I ever hear them I always think of those rides back and forth throughout Philly. Another early memory which is probably from around the same time, was when I jumped off a diving board for the first time. It was at Fox Chase Swim club. A lot of my earliest memories take place there actually. The first time I ever found myself to be intimidating was at that swim club. I wanted to go to the little-kid pool because my brothers were always trying to toss me in the 4-foot pool (swimmies and all.) I walked up to two other little girls who looked about my age and I was going to ask them if I could play with them, because they had dolls (I thought that was awesome because my mom never let me bring my dolls in the pool) so I started to walk over to them and they both got really scared and covered the doll and turned away. Of course, even as a child I was ever-so charming and I ended up becoming friends with them later that day and they told me they thought I was going to steal their doll. Why would they think that? I thought I looked like a pretty nice kid. Whatever.
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